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Jul 6, 2023Liked by Jason McBride

Thinking about The Random Stranger

Dripping colorful droplets of Not Off Colored Chaos

Into the Non Structured Life

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I love the way “Not Off Colored Chaos Into the Non Structured Life” sounds! The whole poem is wonderful, that last part really sings to me. Thanks for sharing!

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The 'Red' haiku is so funny because it's true.

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Thanks!

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Jul 7, 2023Liked by Jason McBride

Oh, this is really intriguing. Colour in poetry. What I notice is that in only 1 of the 3 poems you actually mention the colour. So, in the other two, there's a room for the reader to imagine the colour if the visuals are not available at the time of 'reading'.

Lots of thoughts running through my head now.

Great writing, and great idea.

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Thanks! I think that’s the trick and beauty of poetry--creating the space between the words and the image.

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Lavender waves crash

bravely over her forehead

Framing amber eyes

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Wow! I love this! What a ride your poem is! Thank you for sharing this

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I admire how brilliantly creative you are!

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Thank you for your kind words!

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This was interesting because I think when we write we paint a picture with words. I can’t remember it exactly but I remember reading somewhere about how after a few lines, words have become images which makes colors so important. I still haven’t written a haiku but I’m really enjoying your perspectives!

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At least in my brain, words and images are all connected and flow into each other. Thanks for reading!

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