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Berkana's avatar

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Arlene's avatar

Jason, do you ever write haiku as many current writers do, with fewer than 17 syllables?

Best for me is a 3-line haiku, short line, long line, short line that tops out between 10 and 13 syllables.

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Jason McBride's avatar

I do sometimes write free-meter haiku like that. I read a ton of them and enjoy the innovation happening with modern English-language haiku. I don't think I have published any of my free-verse haiku anywhere. I'll have to post some here in the next few weeks!

I mostly write in the 5-7-5 pattern for two reasons. One, part of my mission is to help make poetry in general less scary and encourage people who were chased off from poetry in school to find their way to reading and writing poetry. 5-7-5 haiku is usually a very accessible place for them to test the poetry waters.

Two, I find the rhythm and constraints of the 5-7-5 syllable count alluring. I just can't get enough of it.

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Arlene's avatar

I look forward to seeing some of your modern-English-language haiku!

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Arlene's avatar

squirrel

winning our race to a tree

drop his nut

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Jason McBride's avatar

I love how your haiku has a feeling of zen and the playfulness of a tale from The Hundred Acre Woods. A perfect spring haiku.

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Samuel Oke's avatar

First one:

Two open textbooks

Laundry, arduous but vital

I'm just winging it

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Samuel Oke's avatar

Second one:

Fan spinning, slowly

Long hours listening to music

Silence, elusive

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Jason McBride's avatar

This one is good too! Feels very peacful

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Jason McBride's avatar

This is a good one! That middle line hits home! I hate laundry.

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Samuel Oke's avatar

Same 😄. Thank you 💯

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Raymond K. Nakamura's avatar

Your plague haiku were interesting examples of the personal feeling universal.

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Jason McBride's avatar

Thanks, Raymond! I'm always having to be reminded that the only way to connect with people is to make things personal.

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Karol Koszorz's avatar

Numero uno:

Stained blue fingertips

Create messier bedsheets

Dried by sunrise

Numero dos:

Patchy brown tongue

Espresso in empty sink

Scrunched clothes messy hair

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Jason McBride's avatar

I love the way you used color in both of these, Karol!

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Liz Gauffreau's avatar

I love learning about your deveopment as a haiku artist.

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Shondra Bowie's avatar

Lumie lamp wakes me

by mimicking sunrise, still

I go back to sleep

Porridge for breakfast,

not much taste to it really,

at least it’s healthy

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Jason McBride's avatar

I love these little haiku sketches, Shondra!

"I go back to sleep" is a very relatable line for me this week!

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Thomas Cleary's avatar

Here are three of them for today:

Wind elevates leaves

breaking the humidity

of the stagnant air

walking on hot asphalt

the firmness of man’s labor

gives into black goo

grocery shopping

the daily task of parents

feathers aimed in flight

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Jason McBride's avatar

These are all wonderful! I especially enjoy your middle poem:

walking on hot asphalt

the firmness of man's labor

gives into black goo

What a compelling image!

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Stace Dumoski's avatar

I have missed more than a month of prompts, lost in a private lockdown of family illness and caretaking. I wish I had this sketchbook/haiku diary a month ago, when this all started (though who knows if my brain could even be focused enough for 17 syllables). But I think I will try to get back into it now. Thank you as always for all the inspiration.

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Jason McBride's avatar

Oof. The private lockdown of family illness and caretaking is the best way I've heard that phenomenon described. I hope everyone is on the mend and that you are able to find some space to recover as well.

I'd love to know how your retrospective haiku sketching goes!

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Hannelore Adler Gailwain's avatar

I loved your haiku sketches. They are a vivid image of how we lived during those lockdown days. The uncertainty of every day, somehow subdued by our new little routines and the hope for better days to come.

Here is my first haiku:

https://substack.com/@hanneloreadler/note/c-120361412?r=6ni25&utm_medium=ios&utm_source=notes-share-action

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Jason McBride's avatar

Thanks for sharing your haiku! It's funny how connected I feel to other people once I've read their haiku sketches. There is something universal in the deeply personal.

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Hannelore Adler Gailwain's avatar

Thank you! I’m happy to hear you liked it. Here is the second one, sorry for the delay: https://substack.com/@hanneloreadler/note/c-121340237?r=6ni25&utm_medium=ios&utm_source=notes-share-action

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Jason McBride's avatar

No worries! This is an asynchronous poetry club 🤣

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