Your haiku paints a vivid, cosmic picture using just a few words. It personifies Jupiter as lonely, maybe highlighting its distance and isolation out in space. Describing it as "sparking below god's toenail" adds a touch of whimsy and imagination, likening a distant celestial glow to something tiny and overlooked, like a spark under a giant’s toenail.
The mention of "sunset's afterglow" ties it back to Earth, connecting the vastness of space with the familiarity of a sunset. It's a beautiful blend of the grand and the intimate, all captured in a brief moment.
Jupiter is in astrological news currently and when I read your post, I imagined an artwork with your comic and all the headlines. Thank you, Jason, a little poetry brings out life’s beauty.
Oh so good….. 🙏🏼 sparking - it speaks to me on a personal level as my youngest son’s nickname since a young age - Sparky. He was a born comedian and miss his calling! He still lights up a room when he walks through the door! I have shortened his nickname to Spark ⚡️ as it is still there …..
I had no idea! I knew of a baseball coach (maybe 2) but did not know about Shultz! Thanks for that tidbit- he did not like it as a kid but he is fine with it now - no idea why but few kids called him Butch 🤷🏻♂️
Your haiku paints a vivid, cosmic picture using just a few words. It personifies Jupiter as lonely, maybe highlighting its distance and isolation out in space. Describing it as "sparking below god's toenail" adds a touch of whimsy and imagination, likening a distant celestial glow to something tiny and overlooked, like a spark under a giant’s toenail.
The mention of "sunset's afterglow" ties it back to Earth, connecting the vastness of space with the familiarity of a sunset. It's a beautiful blend of the grand and the intimate, all captured in a brief moment.
Thank you for your careful reading! It's quite fulfilling and affirming to read your analysis and see unpack all that I tried to put into those lines.
Thank you for the detailed description of your process. It was very informative.
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I will keep doing it for a while
I really enjoyed the imagery of Jupiter in this poem. Well done!
Thanks, John!
Loved hearing about the creative process too, thanks Jason.
Thank you!
Jupiter is in astrological news currently and when I read your post, I imagined an artwork with your comic and all the headlines. Thank you, Jason, a little poetry brings out life’s beauty.
Thank you for being such a faithful reader!
Keep that creative process coming!!
You got it!
Comic-osmotic satellites spark reflective light to see you are a beacon beam of delight.
Thanks!
Oh so good….. 🙏🏼 sparking - it speaks to me on a personal level as my youngest son’s nickname since a young age - Sparky. He was a born comedian and miss his calling! He still lights up a room when he walks through the door! I have shortened his nickname to Spark ⚡️ as it is still there …..
Spark, Sparky …. Sparking ☀️
Sparky is a great nickname! That's what Charles Shultz, the creator of Snoopy and Charlie Brown always went by.
I had no idea! I knew of a baseball coach (maybe 2) but did not know about Shultz! Thanks for that tidbit- he did not like it as a kid but he is fine with it now - no idea why but few kids called him Butch 🤷🏻♂️
Butch is also a terrific nickname!
Then if he were playing for Sparky Anderson he would be batting 1000 😂
It's good to know how you observe the sky like that
I see myself doing this all the time
but I'm still going to spend more time with each word chosen for the Haikus like you do
my inspiration ✨
Thank you, Berkana!
What a perfect class in the dance of word choice in writing. Wonderful. And again, sending this to my young writers in training. Thank you so much!
Thanks for your kind words! I look forward to reading some of the work your young writers create someday!
I’m going to check with younger fellow- the older (equally adored) will likely give me the eye roll 😊
This one is really beautiful!