I enjoyed this! I know Send in the Clowns has a bad rap in many circles, but it's a song that always reminds me of my mom. I feel as if I can now hear the room the person in the poem is inside. Thanks for sharing!
A lot of edgy people find the song Send in the Clowns to be too saccharine, too sentimental. As the kids say, they think it’s cringe. I thinks it’s beautiful but I’m also pretty far from edgy 🤣
Ah, only that? Whew! I thought maybe there was some politically incorrect nonsense I am supposed to be concerned about. I might have had the same objection when I was younger, but I find my tolerance for sentiment has enlarged and deepened with age. For me it’s a pinnacle of popular song. Thanks!
Oh how kind of you to come see my exhibit!! Thank you!! I'm still dealing with covid or my wife and I would meet you in a heartbeat! I hope you enjoy seeing my work and that it encourages your own work. Thanks again! 💚💚
Okay today I tried a couple of these ideas. I combined more than one haiku (although I think they could also stand alone). And after drafting, I switched the lines around in the second haiku. I didn't think it would work but I think it did work okay, maybe better than the original way. https://palimpsestic.substack.com/p/july-1-2023. Anyway, thanks Jason for all the haiku talk and inspiration.
just realized that I only tried one of the ideas in this post (switching lines), the other must have been from another day when you mentioned the multiple-related-haiku idea :-)
I love this haiku! It feels like a hymn. The idea of rainy mushroom alchemy is enchanting and the last line feels like a perfect life philosophy. Would that we all spent more time walking in ways that felt like prayer.
I enjoy your use of touch. This is a tricky sense for me to get in my poetry. I always default to sight and only stretch to include sound on occasion.
Thanks for taking part! I love that you switched the lines. Opening with the question pulls me in. A beautiful love letter!
We like the idea of switching lines. And, in longer poems, even taking the last line and making it the title of the poem. :)
Also, how delightful to think of haiku as a love letter to the Earth! Perhaps the opposite, too? The Earth's love letter to us.
Yes! The Earth is most definitely a love letter to us!
Ah, the birds, the breeze
Here inside, Send in the Clowns
Open up the doors
I enjoyed this! I know Send in the Clowns has a bad rap in many circles, but it's a song that always reminds me of my mom. I feel as if I can now hear the room the person in the poem is inside. Thanks for sharing!
Thanks, Jason. Bad rap? Don't know what that's about! I'm curious.
A lot of edgy people find the song Send in the Clowns to be too saccharine, too sentimental. As the kids say, they think it’s cringe. I thinks it’s beautiful but I’m also pretty far from edgy 🤣
Ah, only that? Whew! I thought maybe there was some politically incorrect nonsense I am supposed to be concerned about. I might have had the same objection when I was younger, but I find my tolerance for sentiment has enlarged and deepened with age. For me it’s a pinnacle of popular song. Thanks!
Responsible risk sounds great!
It’s a pretty empowering concept
Oh how kind of you to come see my exhibit!! Thank you!! I'm still dealing with covid or my wife and I would meet you in a heartbeat! I hope you enjoy seeing my work and that it encourages your own work. Thanks again! 💚💚
I’m very excited for it. I’m sorry to hear you two are still recovering. I’ll have to make my way up to Vancouver again later this summer
That would be wonderful!!! Thank you again!!! 💚💚💚
walking in the door
Mama's perfume stops me short
memento mori
Good one. Perfumes are something I always associate with specific people in my life
How is this my yard?
Breeze full of birdsong, scents of
grass and mint and thyme
Breeze full of birdsong is a tremendous line! I love your haiku！ I can smell your backyard
Aw thanks. I do love my backyard
Okay today I tried a couple of these ideas. I combined more than one haiku (although I think they could also stand alone). And after drafting, I switched the lines around in the second haiku. I didn't think it would work but I think it did work okay, maybe better than the original way. https://palimpsestic.substack.com/p/july-1-2023. Anyway, thanks Jason for all the haiku talk and inspiration.
just realized that I only tried one of the ideas in this post (switching lines), the other must have been from another day when you mentioned the multiple-related-haiku idea :-)
I love these two poems both together and separately!
moss beneath our feet
rainy mushroom alchemy
walking feels like prayer
Thank you, friend. That was a good prompt for a highly visual creature like me!
I love this haiku! It feels like a hymn. The idea of rainy mushroom alchemy is enchanting and the last line feels like a perfect life philosophy. Would that we all spent more time walking in ways that felt like prayer.
I enjoy your use of touch. This is a tricky sense for me to get in my poetry. I always default to sight and only stretch to include sound on occasion.